The Helm of Seven (Part 3)

[C. Lee McKenzie]

This is moving very quickly over the ages. I love the Houndface character, and I'm curious about how these twins will fare.

I hope you're open to editing suggestions. Here are some of you might want to fix:

so consumed BY all his thoughts and cares ABOUT mastering the helmet.

Each child HE left there

And their descendants multiplied and endured across the ages under the watchful eye of Houndface WHO awaitED the day when the Stars would call a new King to the throne

[A.K. Preston]

Thanks! These are helpful :)